Do you have a close friend? Do you
always spend your time with your close friend? What do you think about your
close friend? For me a close friend is someone who cares to me. My close friend
is always besides me whenever I feel happy, sad, and disappointed. I always
spend my time with my close friend. I can’t stay away from her for several days
because without my close friend is like crumbly and hopeless. That’s why I have
a close friend. My close friend is Anak Agung Raka Candra Dewi. There are several
things that make me adore with her, start from the first time we met, her
personality, and how she cares to me.
We met for the first time in OKK
because we were in one group. At first I met Candra, I wasn’t closely and
overly impressed with her. Candra doesn’t talk too much with a person that she
doesn’t know well. I might think that she’s hard to get along with. I didn’t
notice about her after we met several times. I didn’t pause to gaze down upon
her face when we had a chat. Who knows that tiny insignificant curiosity was
what made me take notice and start paying attention to her. Start from OKK we
become a close friend until now.
Candra has a great personality. She is
an organize person. She can manage her schedule very well. Candra is a
responsible student because she always takes care of her duty and finishes it on
time, for example she always submits the assignment on time. Sometimes I talk
some secrets to her and she can keep the secret very well and won’t talk about
it with others. I think she is a nice friend.
Candra always cares to me. She is
the person who always beside me and understand me well. She always listen my
entire story without showing her boring face. When I have problems, Candra will
give me some advices and help me to solve the problems. Furthermore, if I do
not understand about the lesson, she explains to me patiently.
Anak Agung Raka Candra Dewi is my
close friend that I admire so much. Throughout many months of knowing Candra, I
still look at her and adore in every single things about her. From the first
time we met, her great personality, and the way she cares to me are make me
comfortable beside her.
You are so lucky to have a friend like her, right? :)
ReplyDeleteYes. I agree with you. Candra is a kind and smart girl, although I do not know her as well as you.
Your writing is good. You have done your best. You have good explanation and it makes me can understand your story clearly.
However, I think you have to pay attention on the mechanic of your story.
For example, the sentence in the first paragraph. You wrote, "For me a close friend is someone who cares to me." I think it should be "For me, a close friend is someone who cares to me."
I think you also have to pay attention on your grammar. In the first paragraph, you wrote, "My close friend is always besides me whenever I feel happy, sad, and disappointed." I think, it should be, "My close friend always besides me whenever I feel happy, sad, and disappointed."
Overall, you have done your best. Keep writing. :)
Thank you so much Widya for visited my blog and also gave comment on it.
DeleteYes, I am so lucky having a close friend like Candra and also you too :D
Thank you Widya for reminding me about my mistakes in mechanics and grammar. :D
lisna, I agree with you.. have a close friend is something fun :D
ReplyDeleteI like your story lisna :) , and your writing is good..
but I want to give you a recommendation in your last sentence in the first paragraph '
There are several things that make me adore with her, start from the first time we met, her personality, and how she cares to me.
i think it would be better if that sentence become " There are several things that make me pleased with her, start from the first time we met, her personality, and how she cares to me.
I mean word "adore" you can change with "feel pleased or pleased" :)
hmm... I think overall your writing is good enough lisna :)